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 Marceau Vermeil

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PostSubject: Marceau Vermeil   Fri May 02, 2014 7:32 pm

Character Info

Name:
Marceau Vermeil

Gender:
Male

Race:
Human

Age:
29

Personality:
Marceau is a fairly reserved and calm man for the most part. He is very confident in his abilities, and rightfully so. He is a leader, and has a very strategic mind, always observant for a person’s strengths and weaknesses. He has a will of stone, and once he sets his mind to something, nothing will stop him from achieving it. When he enters a room, everyone knows he has entered, for he has an aura of authority and power. Unfortunately, due to his history with his home country, he is skeptical of those around him, for concern over potential agents coming after him into Vale. This does not stop him from making friends, but it is difficult for him to fully trust anyone. He rarely becomes truly angry, but when he does, it is a slow burning anger that can flare at any time, and he holds a grudge fairly easily.

Appearance:
Marceau is a rather handsome man with light brown hair and deep orange, almost red, eyes. He stands about 6 feet tall (183cm) and has rather broad shoulders. He has a large build, but is all muscle. When he isn't wearing his armour, he normally wears a simple t-shirt and jeans, not particularly caring about his appearence. He normally has a goatee and a military-style buzz cut.

Representation:
Kratos

Color:
Vermillion

Semblance:
Marceau's semblance forms a dome around him that is able to absorb energy from attacks, storing it within his body for a short amount of time. It does this by transforming the energy from an attack into a type of storable aura, which is then temporarily attatched to his own. He can then turn this aura back into energy, and expel it in the form of pure force. He can only store the energy for a few seconds before having to get rid of it, and if he tries to contain it longer, it will cause him serious internal damage. He is able to use this only once in a ten minute period before having to "recharge", and again, if he tries to push it, it can cause him serious damage. He rarely needs to use his semblance, and will only use it as a last resort in the event that his defenses fail.

Emblem:
A cracked shield, red with a white outline, and the hilt of a sword emerging from the top, on a black field.

Bio:
Marceau was born in a kingdom independent from the “Big Four”, called Valradia. The son of a noble, he was sent at age 10 to train to join the Royal Guard. He served in the king’s service until he was 22, and was recognized for his fighting prowess. He even helped stop a coup d'etat in the Capitol, when a group of high-ranking generals tried to seize power. After he was honourably discharged, he retained his arms and armour as gifts from the king at the time. One year later, the king was assassinated, and his brother rose to power. His brother suspected the Royal Guard to have taken part in the assassination, and he began a crackdown on the organization, executing a total of fifty-three men and imprisoning over one hundred more. Marceau, under increasing surveillance and run-ins with authorities, fled the country to Vale, in order to protect his life. He has lived there ever since, taken in by the Hunter community due to his fighting prowess and extensive training. He has worked as a Hunter for six years, and has developed ties with Beacon Academy, becoming friends with some of the teachers there.

Equipment and Battle Info

Battle attire:
Marceau wears heavy, European-style armour when he fights. The armour is red, with white accents, and covers most of his body. The only part of him that isn’t covered is his head, as he wears no helmet. He does, however, have a sort of neck guard that comes up and flares out slightly about halfway up his neck, protecting him from attacks that might come if an enemy got under his guard. His gauntlets are scaled plate, whereas the rest of it is plate armour with a light chain mail underneath. He has grown used to the extra weight, and wears it mostly everywhere he goes unless there is a special occasion.

Fighting style:
Marceau’s defense is simply superb. It is the main aspect of his fighting style, and an enemy will be hard pressed to get by his defense. He fights by remaining fairly still and allowing the enemy to assault him until they leave an opening, then striking, most of the time ending the fight with one blow. He retains much of his energy until later in the fight, when his opponent has tired themselves out by trying to get past his guard.

Weapon Name:
Fidèle

Weapon Range:
Melee

Weapon type:
Sword and Shield

Weapon Description:
Marceau’s first weapon is a four-foot, double-edged sword that he wields with only one hand. It is a much lighter blade, enabling him to swing it quicker than it would seem he could. It has a release button in the center of the crossguard, allowing him to use Dust with the blade. The pommel unscrews, revealing a compartment where Dust can be stored in the handle of the weapon. Marceau almost exclusively uses kinetic Dust in this compartment, rarely ever loading it with anything else. He wields the blade in his right hand, and it is stored in a sheathe built into the top of his shield.

His second weapon is a large shield in the shape of a cross. Marceau keeps the bottom point of the cross sharpened so it can also be used as a weapon. The shield also incorporates Dust into it, able to use kinetic Dust in order to protect Marceau even further. He uses it in the event he is defending against a large attack, anchoring him in place and able to prevent him from being knocked back. This is activated by a button on a small handle that is built into the interior of the shield. This handle is held while it is in use, and it allows for increased mobility with the shield, as well as easy access to the Dust release. He wields the shield on his left arm, and it covers about three-fifths of his body if stood up in front of him.

Weapon Abilities:
The weapons do not transform, they are only able to use Dust to enhance Marceau’s fighting ability.

Misc. Info

Family:
Marceau has wealthy, noble parents in Valdrad, as well as a younger sister. His entire family is back in his home country, though, and he hasn’t seen them for 8 years.

Strengths and Weaknesses:
He is strong and tough, able to take a pounding and still continue fighting. He constantly observes his enemies, and is able to anticipate enemies’ movements very well. His reaction time is also something to be commended, as he was required to quickly react to any situation as a part of his Guard training. His fighting style relies a lot on preventing the enemy from breaking through his defense, so if an enemy does break through, he is unable to fight very effectively at extremely close range. He also lacks any ranged capabilities, therefore creating a problem against an enemy that has a firearm or other ranged weapon.

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PostSubject: Re: Marceau Vermeil   Sat May 03, 2014 4:16 am

Okay, well, it all looks okay. Uh, but I need you to space it out a bit more..... Did you post this over Mobile? If so, edit this when you get to a Desk-top. Oh, also, Weapon description is fine, but most everything, I have to say, needs a bit more detail and structure. Over all, just a bit more.

And Semblance, can't forget. I feel as though 2 minutes is a bit too long for someone to be able to see a few seconds into the future. Continuously, anyway. Short it down to a minute and a half, or maybe even a minute, and, uh.... We'll see.

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PostSubject: Re: Marceau Vermeil   Sun May 04, 2014 2:41 pm

Changelog:

- Added more detail in almost all sections
- Complete change of the semblance
- Spaced it out to look better


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PostSubject: Re: Marceau Vermeil   Mon May 05, 2014 6:19 am

Well, you fixed what I pointed out.
Now you wait. A QA might point out other things, but if you get the Recommendation, I'll see about this one getting accepted.

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PostSubject: Re: Marceau Vermeil   Thu May 08, 2014 10:06 pm

Well...They're are a few things I find needing a little fine tuning. The weapon being one of them, namely, the strength of a bastard sword lies in it's weight, it being light doesn't make any sense. And I'm not sure I understand how the pommel is a dust container, because going how swords are made, the pommel is there for two reasons, A: beating your enemy over the head with it, B: to provide balance to the sword.

The shield...I'm not sure how that works. The Dust can protect him right? How? And that shield type is called a "Kite shield." Used in the crusades by Templar knights.

The Semblance is also a little wonky, he can see how a person's muscles move right? That is rather useless, trained combatants, and by that logic, every character in this forum, can do the same without the use of Semblances.

Your bio contains a math error: he was 22 when he was in the military, 23 when he moved to Vale, and is now 29....But, you said eight years, that would leave him at 31. The number of years you're looking for is 6.

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PostSubject: Re: Marceau Vermeil   Fri May 09, 2014 1:03 pm

Alright.

Changelog:

-Fixed bad wording in weapon section
-Fixed error in number of years
-Complete Semblance change
-Added more detail to weapon section

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